1 Powder toy’s powerful bomb 2016-03-14 2 Powder toy’s community(1) 2016-02-29 3 Powder toy’s crane(1) 2016-02-23 4 Powder toy’s elevator(4) 2016-02-22 5 Powder toy’s elevator(3) 2016-02-19 6 Powder toy’s elevator(2) 2016-02-18 7 Powder toy’s elevator making(1) 2016-02-11 8 Powder toy’s idea(7) 2016-01-28 9 Powder city’s idea(6) 2016-01-22 10 IoT 2016-01-21 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 [다음10개]   회 원 김원호 작성일 2012-10-16 Weather    Feeling  Pleasure 제 목 I go a experience!!!!! 내 용 In the school, I go to a experience. In the park first we ride a raft. One of my friend is fall out of the raft and fell in the water. In the water, there are a bug. It is very cute, so a cought. But, he run and I can't see him. The very funny thing is sweet potatoes dig. I dig 8 sweet potatoes. One is veryx12 BIG! It is very fun day.! 답변자 tc0072 답변일 2012-10-17 답변내용 In the school, I go to a experience. In the park first we ride a raft. >> I had a new experience at school. We rode a raft in the park. (syntax and verb tense) One of my friend is fall out of the raft and fell in the water. >> On my friends fell out of the raft and fell into the water. (verb tense and pluralization) In the water, there are a bug. >> In the water, there are bugs. (pluralization) It is very cute, so a cought. >> It is very cute so I caught some. (misspelled word) But, he run and I can't see him. >> But, he ran and I couldn't find him. (verb tense) The very funny thing is sweet potatoes dig. >> The funniest thing is that we harvested some sweet potatoes. (word form) I dig 8 sweet potatoes. >> I was able to harvest 8 sweet potatoes. (word choice) One is veryx12 BIG! >> One is very very big! (better expression) It is very fun day.! >> It is a very fun day! (missing article) =============================================================================================================================== Hi, You did a good job here! I had fun reading your diary. You had a very interesting day! Thank you for sharing it with me! I can't wait to read your next diary entry! :) Teacher Erin