1 Powder toy’s powerful bomb 2016-03-14 2 Powder toy’s community(1) 2016-02-29 3 Powder toy’s crane(1) 2016-02-23 4 Powder toy’s elevator(4) 2016-02-22 5 Powder toy’s elevator(3) 2016-02-19 6 Powder toy’s elevator(2) 2016-02-18 7 Powder toy’s elevator making(1) 2016-02-11 8 Powder toy’s idea(7) 2016-01-28 9 Powder city’s idea(6) 2016-01-22 10 IoT 2016-01-21 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 [다음10개]   회 원 김원호 작성일 2012-10-18 Weather    Feeling  Pleasure 제 목 OUR SOCCER TEAM IS LOSE!!!!! 내 용 In the school I go to my soccer team. Today is very specil. Today is our team VS another team. First, I was GK. In the sacnod half, another team got a ball, and shot. The scoreboard is 2:0. In last, the another team has shot. Scoreboard is 4:0. We lose the game. I was so sad. 답변자 tc0072 답변일 2012-10-19 답변내용 In the school I go to my soccer team. >> At school, I played with my soccer team. (better expression) Today is very specil. >> Today is very special. (misspelled word) Today is our team VS another team. >> Today, our team played agains another team. (better expression) First, I was GK. >> At firts, I was the goal keeper. (missing article) In the sacnod half, another team got a ball, and shot. >> In the second half, the other team got the ball and made a goal. (misspelled word and word choice) The scoreboard is 2:0. >> The score is 2:0. (word choice) In last, the another team has shot. >> In the enf, the other team made another goal. (better expression) Scoreboard is 4:0. >> The final score is 4:0. (better expression) We lose the game. >> We lost in the game. (verb tense) I was so sad. >> no correction =============================================================================================================================== Hi Beetle, Thank you for sharing something about your game! Like what I always tell you, you can do better next time. :) Teacher Erin :)