1 Powder toy’s powerful bomb 2016-03-14 2 Powder toy’s community(1) 2016-02-29 3 Powder toy’s crane(1) 2016-02-23 4 Powder toy’s elevator(4) 2016-02-22 5 Powder toy’s elevator(3) 2016-02-19 6 Powder toy’s elevator(2) 2016-02-18 7 Powder toy’s elevator making(1) 2016-02-11 8 Powder toy’s idea(7) 2016-01-28 9 Powder city’s idea(6) 2016-01-22 10 IoT 2016-01-21 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 [다음10개]   회 원 김원호 작성일 2012-11-21 Weather    Feeling  Pleasure 제 목 Mars Probe 내 용 In sunday, me and my brother made Mars Probe. It is 18 stage, but in 5 stage there are error. So, my father help we. It has radar, camera and propeller. radar is spin and camera, propeller spin too. But it is not end. So,In this sunday, I will end. If it is end, me and my brother made chair and seat lego. Hurry to have to end Mars Probe. 답변자 tc0072 답변일 2012-11-22 답변내용 In sunday, me and my brother made Mars Probe. >> On Sunday, my brother and I made the Mars Probe. (syntax and proper preposition) It is 18 stage, but in 5 stage there are error. >> It has 18 stages, but there was an error on the 5th stage. (better expression) So, my father help we. >> So, my father helped us. (verb tense and proper pronoun) It has radar, camera and propeller. >> no correction radar is spin and camera, propeller spin too. >> The radar, camera and propeller can spin. (better expression) But it is not end. >> But, it is not yet done. (better expression) So,In this sunday, I will end. >> So, we will finish it this Sunday. (better expression) If it is end, me and my brother made chair and seat lego. >> When we're done with that, my brother and I will start making the chair and seat lego. (better expression) Hurry to have to end Mars Probe. >> We are in a hurry to finish the Mars Probe. (better expression) ================================================================================================================================ Hello, I think that is really an exciting activity. :) Good luck to you in making that Mars Probe! Teacher Erin