1 LOL event match 2014-04-01 2 Soccer game 2014-03-25 3 Soccer game 2014-03-25 4 Soccer game 2014-03-25 5 Soccer game 2014-03-25 6 Soccer game 2014-03-25 7 Soccer game 2014-03-25 8 Soccer game 2014-03-25 9 LOL Chamionship 2014-03-17 10 Queen's Gold Medal Being Taken 2014-02-21 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 [다음10개]   회 원 한예호 작성일 2013-08-19 Weather    Feeling  Pleasure 제 목 Pollution 내 용 Today I'm going to tell you about pollution whih is the main problem of the bus. Nowadays people reached a high technique era. Because of that our lives became better. But there are also a important thing that we lost. Which is named an environmet. First, I'm going to tell you about 3 main types of pollution.There are land pollution, air pollution, and water pollution. There are a reason why this is happening. First, for the land pollution, Trash is one of the most harmful tresh for land. Second for the water pollution, we use shampoo and soap for our washing our body. That's why a lot of harmful bubbles go to river or see. and some bad company owners tresh their polluted water to river. and for last air pollution, it is really harmful too. I think it is the main pollution of environmental pollution. It is cause of many CO2s from cars or air planes. I saw a lot of fish corpse in the sea. It was such a terrible sight that i've ever seen. I think to solve this kind of problems, we should not use car so alot. I think riding a bike is much better idea for saving earth. and also I think we shouldn't use shampoo too much. It hurts environment and also it hurts fishes. I hope to environment will be fixed as soon as it could be. 답변자 Addie 답변일 2013-08-21 답변내용 Today I'm going to tell you about pollution whih is the main problem of the bus. [Today,] I'm going to tell you about [pollution, which] is the main problem of [buses.] Nowadays people reached a high technique era. [Nowadays,] people [are living in] a [high-tech] era. Because of that our lives became better. [It is because] of that [why] our lives became better. But there are also a important thing that we lost. [However,] there [is an] important things that [we've] lost. Which is named an environmet. [It is the environment.] First, I'm going to tell you about 3 main types of pollution. First, I'm going to tell you about [the three] main types of pollution. There are land pollution, air pollution, and water pollution. [Correct!] There are a reason why this is happening. There are [reasons] why this is happening. First, for the land pollution, Trash is one of the most harmful tresh for land. First, [for land] pollution, [trash] is one of the most harmful [trashes] for land. Second for the water pollution, we use shampoo and soap for our washing our body. [Second, for water] pollution, we use shampoo and soap [in] washing our body. That's why a lot of harmful bubbles go to river or see. That's why a lot of harmful bubbles go to [the] river or [sea.] and some bad company owners tresh their polluted water to river. [Some] bad company owners [dispose] their polluted water to [the] river. and for last air pollution, it is really harmful too. [Lastly,] air pollution, it is really [harmful,] too. I think it is the main pollution of environmental pollution. I think it is the main pollution of [all the] environmental pollution. It is cause of many CO2s from cars or air planes. It is [because] of [the carbon dioxide] from cars [and airplanes.] I saw a lot of fish corpse in the sea. [Correct!] It was such a terrible sight that i've ever seen. It was [the most terrible sight I've] ever seen. I think to solve this kind of problems, we should not use car so alot. I think to solve [these] kind of problems, we should not use [cars a lot.] I think riding a bike is much better idea for saving earth. I think riding a bike is [a good] idea [to save the] earth. and also I think we shouldn't use shampoo too much. [I also] think [that] we shouldn't use shampoo too much. It hurts environment and also it hurts fishes. It hurts [the] environment and [it also] hurts [the] fishes. I hope to environment will be fixed as soon as it could be. I hope [the] environment will be fixed as soon as [possible.] Notes: 1. Please focus on the proper use of articles and prepositions. 2. Please observe proper word choices. 3. Always remember to use proper punctuation marks for your sentences. Hi Stiven! Thank you for sharing your thoughts about pollution. Keep it up! - Teacher Tracy