1 Debate competition 2019-04-12 2 start of the week 2019-04-08 3 cold and caugh 2019-04-05 4 planning to make a new club 2019-03-25 5 concerning 2019-03-14 6 I want more time 2019-03-08 7 Be thankful for all i've got now 2018-08-03 8 my own credit card 2018-07-31 9 After the field trip 2017-05-17 10 Field trip 2017-05-16 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 [다음10개]   회 원 임세빈 작성일 2014-03-24 Weather    Feeling  Satisfaction 제 목 Two notebooks. 내 용 "So did you open that door, Mackenzie?"Lavender asked. "Of course not.If you are me, you think you want open door that covered with dust bunnies?!"Mackenzie shouted. Rebecca went to the toilet. "So, what are we gonna do?"May asked. "Well..how about this idea?"Lavender asked. "What?"May and Mackenzie both shouted. Lavender wispered to them. "Oh, it's great idea!"May said. "Yeah, that will be fine.Said that again to Rebecca."Mackenzie said.Rebecca was back from toilet. After their secret meeting, they went back to their home. In Rebecca's home, Rebecca wrote something in her note book. And in that same moment, Mackenzie wrote something in her note, too. In Mackenzie note book, it saids, 'We will hide in Doodles market when market was over. On school pajama day...'. And she put her note book in her secret box and started to sleep in her bed. 답변자 ts0060 답변일 2014-03-25 답변내용 "So did you open that door, Mackenzie?"Lavender asked. >> This sentence is correct just don't forget that when you are writing a story, remember to put a comma and a space after every quote that you use.:) Example: "So did you open that door, Mackenzie?", Lavender asked. "Of course not.If you are me, you think you want open door that covered with dust bunnies?!"Mackenzie shouted. >>"Of course not! If you were me, you think you want open door that is covered with dust bunnies?!", Mackenzie shouted. Rebecca went to the toilet. >>Correct! "So, what are we gonna do?"May asked. >>"So, what are we going to do?", May asked. *It's okay to use slang, Esther. It's just better not to use slang form of words when writing a book.^^ "Well..how about this idea?"Lavender asked. >>"Well... How about this idea?", Lavender asked. "What?"May and Mackenzie both shouted. >>"What?", May and Mackenzie both shouted. Lavender wispered to them. >>Great sentence! Just don forget the correct spelling of "Whispered". "Oh, it's great idea!"May said. >>"Oh, that's a great idea!", May said. "Yeah, that will be fine.Said that again to Rebecca."Mackenzie said.Rebecca was back from toilet. >>"Yeah, that will be fine. Say that again to Rebecca." , Mackenzie said. Rebecca was back from toilet. >>This sentence is correct! After their secret meeting, they went back to their home. >>This sentence is correct, just use house instead of home. :) In Rebecca's home, Rebecca wrote something in her note book. >>In Rebecca's house, she wrote something in her notebook. And in that same moment, Mackenzie wrote something in her note, too. >>Great! In Mackenzie note book, it saids, >>In Mackenzie's notebook, it says, 'We will hide in Doodles market when market was over. On school pajama day...'. >>"We will hide in Doodles market when the market is over on school pajama day..." And she put her note book in her secret box and started to sleep in her bed. >>Wow! ****************************************************************************************************************************** Hi Esther! What a great story! I guess I will be your fan when you become a writer. :) Just remember the corrections that I taught you so you can improve your writing skills. :) GOOD JOB! -Teacher Paula