1 Powder toy’s powerful bomb 2016-03-14 2 Powder toy’s community(1) 2016-02-29 3 Powder toy’s crane(1) 2016-02-23 4 Powder toy’s elevator(4) 2016-02-22 5 Powder toy’s elevator(3) 2016-02-19 6 Powder toy’s elevator(2) 2016-02-18 7 Powder toy’s elevator making(1) 2016-02-11 8 Powder toy’s idea(7) 2016-01-28 9 Powder city’s idea(6) 2016-01-22 10 IoT 2016-01-21 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 [다음10개]   회 원 김원호 작성일 2015-03-23 Weather    Feeling  Pleasure 제 목 Humanoid adventure 4 내 용 Nium is almost run out of battery, so, Nium fight hard as he could! Then, Gpgpgp grab the Nium’s head. But, Nium also grab the Gpgpgp’s controller. Gpgpgp and Nium both began to run each side. But, Nium was grabbing the Gpgpgp’s controller, Gpgpgp’s controller got get out! Safe for Gpgpgp, it was not off. But, lose the balance. So, Gpgpgp turn to swimming mode. Because Gpgpgp think there is also water, there is swimming mode. So, Gpgpgp go to safer place. There is also a only 1 chance. But, he or she do not fight with other robot but, fixing the robot and etc. So, Gpgpgp use chance. Gpgpgp is safe from the hell. But, Nium do not have battery, so, he died(poor Nium…) There is only 8 robot left. Huwinaro has not enough energy, so, he go to middle of the maze. The Light was hidding on the ground to catch someone. When Huwinaro touch the Light, Light jump to the Huwinaro and began to fight. Huwinaro grab the Light’s big head. Then, began to hit Light very hard. Light start the fight, but, Light lose!!! But, Huwinaro do not have battery, he throw the Light to Jenibo and ran to get battery. So, now, Huwinaro is 100 percent. Light died and, everybody is on the middle of the maze. There is Huwinaro, Eco, Gpgpgp, Fighter, Tiny, Hobbit, Nut and Men. Everybody except Huwinaro and Nut,began to hit nut! But, Huwinaro leave and go to the maze. It is because he found the house of Jenibo. He go to Jenibo’s house and throw rock to Jenibo. So, 5 Jenibo began to come to Huwinaro. Huwinaro go to the middle of the maze. Then, Huwinaro go to bushes and, everybody(Eco, Gpgpgp, Fighter, Tiny, Hobbit and men) began to fight with Jenibo. Of course, Nut was die(very very poor Nut…)…… 답변자 ts0096 답변일 2015-04-06 답변내용 Nium is almost run out of battery, so, Nium fight hard as he could! -Nium almost ran out of battery, so he fought as hard as he could! Then, Gpgpgp grab the Nium’s head. -Then, Gpgpgp grabbed Nium's head. But, Nium also grab the Gpgpgp’s controller. -But Nium also grabbed Gpgpgp's controller. Gpgpgp and Nium both began to run each side. -Gpgpgp and Nium both began to run on each side. But, Nium was grabbing the Gpgpgp’s controller, Gpgpgp’s controller got get out! -But Nium was grabbing Gpgpgp's controller, so his controller got out! Safe for Gpgpgp, it was not off. -It was safe for Gpgpgp because it was not off. But, lose the balance. -But, he lost balance. So, Gpgpgp turn to swimming mode. -So, Gpgpgp turned to swimming mode. Because Gpgpgp think there is also water, there is swimming mode. -Because Gpgpgp thought there was also water, there was also swimming mode. So, Gpgpgp go to safer place. -So, he went to a safer place. There is also a only 1 chance. -There was also only one chance. But, he or she do not fight with other robot but, fixing the robot and etc. -But he did not fight with other robots, and just fixed the robot and etc. So, Gpgpgp use chance. -So, Gpgpgp used this chance. Gpgpgp is safe from the hell. -Gpgpgp was safe from hell. But, Nium do not have battery, so, he died(poor Nium…) -But, Nium did not have battery, so poor Nium died. There is only 8 robot left. -There were only eight robots left. Huwinaro has not enough energy, so, he go to middle of the maze. -Huwinaro did not have enough energy, so he went to the middle of the maze. The Light was hidding on the ground to catch someone. -LIght was hiding on the ground to catch someone. When Huwinaro touch the Light, Light jump to the Huwinaro and began to fight. -When Huwinaro touched Light, Light jumped into Huwinaro and began to fight. Then, began to hit Light very hard. -Then, he began to hit Light very hard. Light start the fight, but, Light lose!!! -Light started the fight, but he lost! But, Huwinaro do not have battery, he throw the Light to Jenibo and ran to get battery. -But Huwinarod did not have battery, so he threw Light to Jenibo and ran to get battery. So, now, Huwinaro is 100 percent. -So now, Huwinaro was 100 percent charged. Light died and, everybody is on the middle of the maze. -Light died and everybody was in the middle of the maze. There is Huwinaro, Eco, Gpgpgp, Fighter, Tiny, Hobbit, Nut and Men. -There were Huwinaro, Eco, Gpgpgp, Fighter, Tiny, Hobbit, Nut and Men. Everybody except Huwinaro and Nut,began to hit nut! -Everybody except Huwinaro and Nut began to hit nut! But, Huwinaro leave and go to the maze. -But Huwinaro left and went to the maze. It is because he found the house of Jenibo. -It was because he found the house of Jenibo. He go to Jenibo’s house and throw rock to Jenibo. -He went to Jenibo's house and threw rocks to Jenibo. So, 5 Jenibo began to come to Huwinaro. -So, five Jenibos began to come to Huwinaro. Huwinaro go to the middle of the maze. -Huwinaro went to the middle of the maze. Then, Huwinaro go to bushes and, everybody(Eco, Gpgpgp, Fighter, Tiny, Hobbit and men) began to fight with Jenibo. -Then, Huwinaro went to bushes and everybody began to fight with Jenibo. Of course, Nut was die(very very poor Nut…)…… -Of course, very poor Nut died. Comments: Hi Huwinaro! I just read this story but I enjoyed it. It was another story about robot fights and it was like I'm watching Transformers! Good job! Just follow my corrections here. -Don't put "the" with proper names. -Use past tenses. -Avoid using "but" and "so" too many times.