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회 원	박효정	작성일	2015-05-29
Weather		Feeling	Pleasure
제 목	Swimming
내 용	You may be surprised to learn that swimming has a long history. People have been enjoying swimming for more than 7,000 years! The earliest records of swimming were found on some cave wall paintings from the Stone Age. The paintings clearly showed that swimming was practiced at that time.Many historic books from 2000 BC depict swimming, too. For example, the Bible, the Iliad, and the Odyssey give written descriptions of swimming. However, the style of swimming practiced at that time is still unknown.According to many history books, swimming became really popular in the Middle Ages. In Britain, swimming was required of knights. Romans also built swimming pools at all the places they conquered. Swimming pools played an important role in their social gatherings.
답변자	ts0068	답변일	2015-06-02
답변내용	You may be surprised to learn that swimming has a long history. GOOD SENTENCE! People have been enjoying swimming for more than 7,000 years! GOOD SENTENCE! The earliest records of swimming were found on some cave wall paintings from the Stone Age. GOOD SENTENCE! The paintings clearly showed that swimming was practiced at that time. GOOD SENTENCE! Many historic books from 2000 BC depict swimming, too. GOOD SENTENCE! For example, the Bible, the Iliad, and the Odyssey give written descriptions of swimming. GOOD SENTENCE! However, the style of swimming practiced at that time is still unknown. GOOD SENTENCE! According to many history books, swimming became really popular in the Middle Ages. GOOD SENTENCE! In Britain, swimming was required of knights. GOOD SENTENCE! Romans also built swimming pools at all the places they conquered. GOOD SENTENCE! Swimming pools played an important role in their social gatherings. *GOOD SENTENCE!